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Hi My name is Sakthi priyah.I am currently doing my GCE O levels examinations this year.It is a very crucial and major year of my life.The results of this examinations would allow me to go one step higher in archieveing my goals and aims in life.Well my main goal in life is to become a doctor.It has always been my childhood dream to do medicine.I find that being a doctor is a noble profession.Moreover the thought to become a doctor was triggered by my family.My dad had always dreamt of me becoming a doctor.What can i say it is afterall an child's duty to fullfill their parents dream.However i also have alternate carear choices if i do not get to fullfill my dream of becoming a doctor.Other than that i am just like every other teenager.My interests and hobbies are mainly sports.I love to play sports games.The most favourite game of mine would be soccer.I know its a not a sport that most girls would resort to,but i do like the game of soccer.My favourite team is the one and only AC MIlaN.My favourite player would definitely be KAKA.He is the most awesome player.Besides soccer my other interests would include going for hikes and hanging out with my family,relatives and my cousins.I am very family oriented person.I also enjoy spending quality time with my parents and my sister.I know it sounds wierd but thats me.I also enjoy reading books which are about past experiences of our ancestors,more like diary reading.In terms of school work i am hard working and i do my homework on time.The only weakness in me is that i am lazy,but i am learning to put my weaknesses aside.I believe that with determination , perserverance and also not forgeting with gods help it is possible to archieve my aims for this year.

Comments :

Use caps when needed.

Note your punctuation and tenses.

Never start your sentence with "Well"

Many spelling errors.

No slang eg "most awesome"

The problem with your writing is that you write as if English is your third language. You will have to learn to be more concise in your sentences and go straight to the point.

TWO PARAGRAPHS OF A BOOK FROM AN APPRECIATED AUTHOR

I crested the hill and looked down at the ruins in the moonlight.

The city was new.

I blinked.Nothing changed,although everything already had.

The city was alive.

People,beautiful creatures in long,colored robes,walked among pillared

walkways and sat upon marble chairs.Their long hair,gold and black and

red,hung like shawls over their shoulders.They moved as if in a dream,

or perhaps it was because I was in a dreamlike state.For I could not say

how I felt at that moment.I should have been in a shock.But I didn't register

what I saw as real because I no longer felt human.I moved forward,toward

them,wanting to be part of them.Yet it was as if my feet no longer touched

the ground.They floated and I drifted.I could vanish into space in an instant

It was good.I was in the right place at the right time.I was coming home to

place beyond space and time.A portion of my mind left me then, and a larger

part of my soul entered the void.

I stepped into the city.

I sat down on a smooth white seat.

Someone noticed me.Then another.They smiled joyfully, hopefully.

I closed my eyes and waited for them to come to me.

To serve me.

Title of the book:The Immortal

Author:Christopher Pike

Comments :

Notice how the author puts short sentences to good effect here.

PLAN 2000 paper 1(Running Away)

Intro:

-Finally the day which I have been waiting for had finally arrived

-First day at my new transfer school

-scared .

-saw the pupils of the school

-they did not look friendly and had fierce looks on their faces

-form teacher came and introduced herself

-brought me to class

Para2

-introduced myself to the class

-stammered and most were giggling

-I went to my seat

-not knowing seated in front of class bully

-my class mate seated beside me was named tom

-he seemed nice

-then came recess

-it was my favourite period

-loved to eat

-glutton

-I was very fat

Para3

-classmates saw me eating

-after recess

-started to bully me in class

-ignored them and tried to run away from them

-missed school

-finally my classmate Tom advised me to not run away from my problems

-told my teacher

Para4to5

-teacher spoke to us

-all of us learnt our mistakes

-decided to cut on down on my food intake

Comments :

Story-line too simplistic. Too much time and writing is spent on the circumstances. I expect more thought to be put into developing a good story to tell.

Nov 2003 summary

???Why the money developed by China proved so successful???

-State guaranteed their value

-made sure that the coins conformed to a recognised shape and design

-Coins carried a low value and thus would be needed in large amounts for everyday trading

-Coins encouraged traders and merchants to trade which would enabe the coins to flourish

-Coins were made of precious metals which would be needed to weigh out its amount

-Invented banknotes to substiute coins to avoid tedious process of weighing

-Banknotes issued by the state thus had equal value to the specific of coins

???Why money produced later by other countries also proved successful???

-Gold and silver were mined in significant quanities

-Coins were fashioned out from these metals in leading cities

-Their value earned widespread reputation

???Why in the end, our money today follows the chinese model so closely???

-Coins became the means of payment in many communities

-Their buying power is determined by goverment authorities -China used cheap metal to make their coins which is our modern coins today

-People scrape off the coins.

-Cheap imitations,Govt re issued money

November 2004 Paper 1

Qn2] Write about an occasion when a furoius arguement took place,based on a case of mistaken identity.

The magnificent scenery,the long stretch of sandy beaches and the sun.I have finally arrived at Hawaii.I have been waiting all year round for this moment.After working so hard, I derserved this good break to unwind.I headed off to the beach Aloha, after settling down at a five star hotel,"Long bay".The atmosphere at the beach was very vibrant and lively.There were many good looking people at the beach named Aloha. I found a good spot and was tanning myself.The icy tropical drink cooled me as I took sips of it.As I was dozing off,this old man,dressed in torn and tattered clothes approached me.Amy is that you,he asked.Before I could reply, he interupted me again.Remember me he asked.I am your father.It has been 5 years since I saw you.I told him that I was not his daughter.He must be mistaken.However,he remained there telling me that I was daughter.I was irritated by this man.I replied once again that I was not his daughter.I took out my identification card which i always kept with me.I showed him the proof that I was not his daughter.He did not believe and was argueing with me that I was his daughter.He was saying,Come on Amy,I know I have done somthing wrong,But please do not runaway from me again.He started yelling at me.He was trying his best to convince me that I was his daughter.Amy,he said I am your dad.I was keeping cool but he kept on insisting that I was his daughter and that got me really angry.I shouted at him,I am not your dad and leave me alone.He got angry and said,I am your dad,Tom.This arguement caught the attention of other patrons of the beach.I felt embarrased at the situation which was taking place at the beach.

Some people stood there watching us argue.The old man named Tom was reluctant in leaving the place.He stood firm and said,Amy I have changed please believe me.I am not going to go back to my old ways.I have really learnt my lesson through the hard way.I have reformed.I was angry with the man and felt extremely embarrased as many people were having their eyes on our conversation.I called the security guards whom were patrolling at the beach.They immediately came to my aid.They spoke to the man but he still remained stuborn and did not leave the place.They resorted to carrying him off the place.He tried to break free but could not as the security guards were much stronger than him.After placing the man in a police van , they assured me that they would take care of him.He would be placed in the local police station.Before he left,he said that,Amy please forgive me with a sad look on his face.After they left,I went back to my tanning and the crowd of people dispersed.However my mind was not at peace as the sad look on the man's face kept on appearing on my thoughts.I decided to leave the beach.While walking to the hotel,I kept thinking about the situation which took place at the beach.That got me thinking about my own father.I am sure that it would be very difficult to leave without my father.Having thought about the situation,I decided to help the old man Tom.After having a good and refreshing shower,I headed off to police station which was located near the hotel I was staying.Tom was lying behind bars.I spoke to the officer in charge and bailed him out.Tom was happy to see me.Amy,Thank you for coming.I told him that Iwas not his daughter and that my name was not Amy.It is Grace.He shook his head in disbelief as his eyes welled up with tears.But,he said,if you are not my daughter,then where is my Amy.He asked some questions relating to their family and all I could do was to stare at him blankly.That made him belief that I was not his daughter.He felt bad and apologised to the scene he created at the beach.He told me that I looked exactly like his daughter.The lond black hair,the brown eyes and the rosy cheeks.I told him,Don't worry Uncle Tom,I will help you find your daughter..

We went to a mall which was situated near the police station.We went to a restaurant to have dinner.Uncle Tom started to gobble the food as soon it came .As he ate he narrated the story of his family.He lived in a small town named,Kono.He lived in a bungalow with his wife and daughter Amy.He wife died when Amy was sixteen years old.He was unable to bear the thought of his wife dying and started to drink and smoke heavily.He neglected Amy.He also met this lady named Maria.She was rich.Tom decided to remarry as he thought Amy would have a better life with a mother.Unknowingly,Tom did not know that Maria hated children and wanted to marry him as he was also very wealthy.She wanted to swindle all his money away.Tom and Amy moved to Maria's house after they got married.Maria started abusing Amy whenever Tom left for work. Amy was good girl,she obeyed her stepmother.However,Maria went over the limits and Amy could not take it anymore.I did not believe Amy whenever she told me that Maria abused her.Therefore one night Amy ranaway from home.I tried all ways in finding her but could not.Later on,Maria took away all my money and threw me out her house.She disowned me.I was devastated,I realised her true colours then.I regretted in not listening to my own daughter.As I left,Maria gave me a letter that Amy wrote when she ran away.In that she wrote that she was going to stay at her grandmother's house which was located near the hotel.I made my way on search of her.That was when I mistook you of her, he said.I was brought to tears when I heard the story.After our dinner I told Uncle Tom not to worry and it was my duty to help him.Uncle Tom was staying in a local apartment.We decided to meet next morning to look for his daughter.

Next morning,I met Uncle Tom at his apartment.We set off in search of his daughter.Uncle Tom had the address of his daughter's accomadation while I had a map to help find the place.We reached this small village.There were little huts everywhere.Uncle Tom went hut number 22 and knocked on the door.The people at the village were very friendly.The door opened and out came this tanned skin,brown eyed with long and black hair.That was Amy.She looked exactly like me.She could regconise her father and stood speechless as she saw her father.The both of them then hugged each other with streams of

tears of joy flowing from their cheeks. I am sorry Amy said Uncle Tom.It's alright father said Amy.I should have never trusted Maria said Uncle Tom.They broke off as he told her about Maria.She told him that she was studying at a local university.Uncle Tom's face lighted up a glow.He said that he was proud of her.He then introduced me to her.Amy was shocked to see me as we both looked alike.I felt happy that I have helped someone reunite with their family.We then headed to a local restaurant to celebrate for the reunited family.Uncle Tom promised to never neglect Amy while Amy promised to never runaway.I was feeled with joy as I saw the both of them.Now that I have made new friends here.I am looking forward for the remainder of my vacation.Further more,Iam certain that this incident would lead to a true and everlasting friendship.

My comments so far :

The magnificent scenery, the long stretch of sandy beaches and the sun.I have finally arrived at Hawaii.I have been waiting a whole year just for this moment.After working so hard, I deserved this good break to unwind.I headed off to the beach after settling down at the hotel (give a description or a name to the hotel).The atmosphere at the beach was vibrant and lively.There were many beautiful people. (doesn’t sound quite right. Beautiful people at the beach? What do you mean? What were they doing?)I found a good spot and was tanning myself as the icy tropical drink cooled me as I took sips of it. (Break this sentence into two. SS). As I was dozing off,an old man,dressed in torn and tattered clothes approached me.”Amy is that you?”,he asked.Before I replied no (Before I could reply?), he interrupted(sp) me again.

Remember me he asked.I am your father.It has been 10 years since I saw you.I told him that I was not his daughter.He must be mistaken.However,he remained there telling me that I was daughter.I was irritated by this man.I replied once again that I was not his daughter.I took out my identification card which i always kept with me.I showed him the proof that I was not his daughter.He did not believe and was argueing with me that I was his daughter.He was saying,Come on Amy,I know I have done somthing wrong,But please do not runaway from me again.He

Xinmin Sec sch

1.The word tells me that they were working hard to win the opponent.

b.The sunlight was flashing of the ocean's surface.

c.They were excited to watch the race.

2.They would be biased.They would be cheating as they might support each others village team.

3.They started to quarrel.

4.the first consequence is there is no result on which team won.The second consequence is both team members ended up fighting.

a.Altercation

b.the gentil man threw the sand on the fighting rowers.

c. The eku enabled the gentleman to move into the mass with ease as it acts as a weapon to protect himself.

5.The author is saying that practitioners of martial arts do not learn it for the means hurting anyone permanantly but for protecting lives and selfdefence.

6.Martial arts do martial sports for a interest.

Chij Toa Payoh

1.The two surfaces are parchment made from animal skin and beaten mulberry bark.

2.Real paper was much cheaper to be made and it be made in greater quantities.

3.The evidence is ," it was forbitten to even step on a piece of paper with writing on it."

4.'Set the stage'means that it laid a fountation.

5.The word is "reached".

6.Materials printed from the Gutenberg era were made from hemp and linen rags.The strenght and purity of this substances ensured that the materials could survive for hundred years.

7.The writer was marvelled by Bach's cantata.He was amazed by his energy.Munn on the other hand waas not appreciative of Bach's cantata at all.She looked down it as Bach used a low quality of paper.

8.The word is hopeless.

Passage B

9.Her shoes are remarkable because they were made from recycled materials.

10.She is determined and adventurous person.

11.She wanted to be a rolemodel for other industries and wanted to increase the value of recycled materials.

12.She had to start looking for recycling companies by herself.

13.The common material is aluminium.

14.He is trying to imply that Saudi Arabia recycles most of its materials.

15.Brittle-sretched.

fraction-a portion

ingeniuty-bright

squandering-spending

intergral-important

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