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I am Camarine Heng. My name means Christ And Me Always Remain In None Else. This name was created by my dearest dad. He is someone I love and respect a lot(this is from the bottom of my heart). Even though many people think that the way he treats me is too controlling, I still love him for who he is as a person. Some may see him as someone who is very serious and some see him as a friendly person. But I see him as someone who is unique in a way which is very different from others.
First of all, I know that he loves my family A LOT! Everyday at home and on the phone, he prays for us and watches my brother and I fall asleep until our eyelids slowly close. Sometimes he kisses me on my forehead or even touches and squeeze the top of my head. He gather us for weekly family devotions and bring all four of us out for a meal or even go and visit other family's homes. We may rather stay at home and do our things. But it's for our own good as I have learnt a lot from all these. All in all, he is a 'people' person actually.
On the other hand, my brother does not see this in him like many others too. They hate him for being too controlling, demanding and being a perfectionist (I find him like that too but I still accept him for that because my Heavenly Father helps me to). He seems fierce and unapproachable to them. He will only be like that when the other person seems like he is threatening him and does not respect his authority.
However, once you get to know him as a friend, he is someone who is a friendly and fun person with an interesting sense of humour. He just wants to get to know you more and pray for you. He is just going to add you in his list of thousand of friends and people whom he prays for daily in his storeroom. This is where he can spent any part of the day to intercede and seek out God. He even told us he also cries out to God daily! Recently, he has been going in there to pray at a very late time so that (I believe) he can sleep in in the morning. (You see, he has not been sleeping very well thus dose on and off during any kind of meeting and has a really bad nose problem). Therefore he is actually a very special and different person whom people can approach and know.
P.S. I hope you can know me better in this writing of my dad and of course get to know him. :)
Comments :
I hope to get to know your dad too.
Please count the number of times you use "really".
Note your spelling eg "perfectionist not perfectionistic".
Too much use of "he"
We need to think of ways to give your writing more impact.
2 Paragraphs from a book of a writer's style which I like
At classes, he would volunteer to sit beside me and I could not reject him. He would try very hard at starting a conversation but I would always hint him to shut up by giving him a silent glare. It often worked, but after a few minutes, he would be talking again.
During lunch break, we would eat together. He always offered to help me to buy the drinks. I wanted to tell him off, to say that I preferred to eat alone, but when he returned with my favorite drink, I gave in and .jpg)
just ate my meal in silence, trying hard to keep my eyes off him.
Rumours about us being an item surfaced after a few weeks. Jacky was especially concerned about disclaiming them. However, no one believed him. One day he even threatened to beat anyone who spread the rumours, and that was the first time I saw his trademark smile vanishing from his face.
-I believe you by Low Kay Hwa
Comments :
This is good for the topic "Running Away", except for that "tears..." part. You have chosen well - this story is very relevant to us, as a class.
Planning for Repaying a kindness
Introduction : It is about a person whom I really respect and learn from a lot but who is going to transit into a new work place and I'm not able to see the person as often as usual.
Para 1
- How he impacted my life-> Through listening to him in the morning devotions, GB camps, or just being around him to hear what he has to say.
- He has also impacted my dad's life and brought us closer together since my dad and I we both know what is going on in school.
- What he has taught me-> He has taught me to be teachable and always listening to the people around me as they may have needs which we may not know of until we hear them out.
Para 2
- I cried when I heard he was leaving (How did you respond?)
- What I leant from him even though it was my last time to spend time with him
Para 3
- How I wrote a card to encourage him and came for a farewell party to see how he was loved by many others (Is a card of encouragement enough to repay a kindness for this topic?)
- How I felt when I still see glimpses of him around
Conclusion
- We should cherish the people around us by repaying them a kindness even a simple note can encourage them
- They may be here but not for long!
Mind Map of Running Away
- from the starting line of a race
- from an admirer or friend
- from a problem (the most common one)
- from a person I dislike
- from stress!
Comments :
I need more details on how he made an impact on you and what he taught you.
3-4 paragraphs seem a bit short for me.
What is the "Running Away" for?
080707 - Thanks for adding the details. Makes your outline more complete. You should identify the person at the start so that we need not wonder who it is that you are talking about. I guess it should be Pastor John.
Summary Points for 2003 Paper 2
Why the money developed by China proved so successful, why the money produced later by other countries also proved successful, and why in the end our money today follows the Chinese model so closely.
1. Coins were made of cheap metals
2. state guaranteed their value
3. coins conformed to a recognised shape and design
4. coins could be strung together
5. Encouraged an increase in merchants and traders
6. they had to be weighed out in precise amounts (could not be counted)
7. Banknotes were created to be used in the public
8. They had their value same as the number of coins
9. a convenient form of money.
10. Eastern Europe extracted gold and silver to fashion their own metal coins
11. had a widespread reputation
12. cities flourished and became most successful trading centres
13. cheap imitated coins were chipped off and circulated
14. less precious metals were used after governments re-issued them
15. coins circulated lost their value
16. the government and an official stamp determined their buying power
17. lead back to original Chinese model
Name: Camarine Heng
Index no.: 3
3 Good sentence/starters for sentences: a. After sustaining a broken rib and seven stitches in the head, most people would have problems standing, much less fighting.
4 Good phrases to "borrow"
a. fame and fortune
b. beef up his ring experience
c. on the receiving end
d. no hard feelings
November 2004 Paper 1 Section 1
I got to change my story to another title as it is out of point. Flight may be better but I do not know how to plan for it.
2. Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place, based on a case of mistaken identity.
My Plan
1st paragraph:
- Introduction of my family going for a free photoshoot appointment.
2nd Paragraph
- the shop was very busy with the customers waiting to enquire about their own photoshoot
- my father was introduced to this gentleman who was a shop assisstant and took down his particulars
- my father waited one side with us
3rd Paragraph
- A man came up to him and said that it was our turn to start our photoshoot
- a man interrupted and claim that it was actually his turn to have his photoshoot taken as he had been waiting for a long time to start
4th Paragraph
- the heated argument between the two man
"Come on, hurry up, we are going to be late for the photo-shoot if you all do not leave now." my impatient father was getting annoyed by my mother and I for taking our own time to decide what to dress for our first family portrait. We were called up by the person in charge of the shop who told us that we were one of the lucky families chosen for their free photo-shoot try-out in their shop. Finally, our whole family got out of the house and our father drove us to the shop. As we had not come to the new district before, we took some time to locate the shop.
The four of us entered into this newly furnished small shop which was filled with many people who were waiting for their turn. Some couples had their photos showed on the newly built-in Mac computers by the persons in charge. While my mother and I looked around, my father stood at the end of the red couch which was near the entrance of the shop. A man wearing a similar shirt like the rest of the people working in the shop approached my father. His nametag displayed his name and his job as a shop assistant. He took down the particulars of our family and told us to hold on for a minute while he arranged for our photo-shoot.
“Where do you think you are going? When is it my turn? I have been waiting for an hour for my turn,” a distraught looking stranger interrupted the man. “And no one has entertained me all this time while this man who had just come was taken care first! What kind of service is this?” Heated words burst out of his mouth and his face was boiling with rage. This alerted everyone on the shop who began wondering what was going on.
The embarrassed shop assistant tried to justify his cause but the man kept firing his words at him, giving him no chance to explain himself at all. Large droplets of saliva spilled out of his mouth at the same time.
"Please, sir," the man whisphered till he ejaculated to get his attention. "Listen! We have been very busy trying to entertain so many people since morning and it's not easy to recognise you after meeting so many other people in a day."
The berated man who did not seem to see any reason at all in his fury just burst out even louder until the echoes of his piercing words were heard in the shop. What was the point of telling him any sense when he is so angry and hot-headed. I thought secretly.
Then it seems like my father heard what I thought as I saw him dragging the man out of the shop by pulling his collar. Outside the shop and out of everyone's view, he tried to calm him down but he just walked away after making the scene in the shop. Now out of everyone's view, the people in the shop continued doing what they were to do.
"Sorry about that. Thanks for getting him out of the shop. I wanted to settle him first but I mistook you instead of him. Maybe it's because he seemed so unapproachable as time went by and it's so difficult to remember who was who." the apologetic gentleman cleared the matter with my father who appeared flustered after he came back into the shop. "Now we can get back to where we started."
With our make up still on, we all went for a scrumptious dinner in the area and with our family photos in a CD for free!
What I've just learnt in the English lesson on 3 August 2007: We need to pay our Singapore ministers enough so that they do not find other ways to earn money and get corrupted!!
XIN MIN SEC SCH PRELIMS
1a) They are using all their strength to win in the race. (to do what?)
b) Why do the villagers need to squint to watch the race?
The sun was shining very brightly on their eyes and they need to squint to focus their eyes to see the winner. (Sure? It's more than that. Why do you squint? Think about it.) bright reflection.
c) What does line 8 reveal abt their emotions at tt pt of time?
They were very anxious to find out who was the ultimate winner. (To see? maybe to see and know? What do you think?)
2) What problem do you think will arise when you have two judges from each vila to decide the winner of the race?
They will be bias towards their own village and a fight might happen thereafter. (Sure they will be bias. The contention is in what situation will they be bias?)
Ans: If the judges disagree there is noone to choose who is the winner.
great when there is a tie and a close finish, there is great probability that there will be biasness in their judgement to choose the winner from their own village.
3)WHAT ARE THE 2 CONSEQUENCES WHEN THE JUDGES COULD NOT DECIDE THE WINNER?
The first consequence is a heated argument (Yes) and the second is that a fight broke out among the two representatives and the two rowing teams. (Sure?)
Ans: quarrel and a fight
4a) ANOTHER WORD FOR NOISY QUARREL.
The word is, "altercation".
b) WHAT DO YOU THINK THE GENTLEMAN DID TO CREATE THIS 'A WHIRLWIND CLOUD OF SAND'?
He used the eku to throw sand onto the opponents in the fight so as to create a confusion among the people fighting and blind them. (OK but what does a whirlwind tell you?)
ANS: He used the eku that he picked up to scoop up the sand and flicking it rapidly to the people who are fighting.
c) WHAT DO YOU THINK ENABLED THE GENTLEMAN TO MOVE WITH RELATIVE EASE INTO THE CENTRE OF THE UNCONTROLLED MASS?
(Try again): He used the eku to block him from being seen by creating a whirlwind of sand among the fighting bodies.
Ans: It was his superb master art skill which enabled him to move through it. Well verse in using the oar.
d) STATE ONE THING THE ELDERLY MAN DID TO STOP THE FIGHT.
He made one of the rowers fall down so that the rest also tripped on him. (OK)
ANS:trip one causing others to trip over the hunched figure
e) WHAT WAS SO REMARKABLE ABOUT THE WAY HE DID IT?
(Try again): He only used a boat oar to stop the fight.
ANS: He was able to stop the fight without causing any injury.
5)What do you think the author is saying in this sentence?
He wants the people who practice marital arts to remember and learn from the lesson that they should not abuse their power to fight to be used when angry. (Is that the lesson taught by the old man?)
ANS: practitioners should follow the old man by not causing permanent damage or death to anybody when using their martial arts skill.
6) In your own words what do many martial artistes consider to be the distinction between martial sport and martial art?
They think that martial sport is only for play which is not similar to martial art in the way that it is ineffective to protect oneself. (Confusing sentence. Can you make it simpler and clearer?)
ANS: The distinction is
7a) Two ways martial artistes practice in their training to avoid hurting each other.
The first way is alter their training to practice counter training methods (??) and the second way is applying "pull" techniques before they hurt the opponent. (Yes)
Ans: They use pull techniques stopping them just before contact and precautionary moves.
b) what is the ultimate conclusion of a technique? line 10
The ultimate conclusions of a technique are serious injuries and even death. (a proper sentence please)
8. Begin to understand who I really am and have a deep insight of myself.
9. Para 6 what is the ultimate goal in martial sports?
Ans: to develop techniques, knowledge and character in the practitioners
Anticipated: eagerly awaited or longing to come
simultaneously: altogether concurrently or at the same time
dysfunctional: not really working
pervert: corrupt or distort
CHIJ TP Prelim 07 Paper 2
1. 2 surfaces people used to paint on
The two surfaces are the walls of caves and on beaten mulberry bark.
2. 2 reasons why Egyptian parchment was less popular than real paper.
Real paper was cheaper to make than the Egyptian parchment and the parchment could not be produced in great quantities like real paper.
3. WHAT EVIDENCE IS THERE THAT THE CHINESE PLACED GREAT IMPORTANCE ON PAPER?
No one could step on a piece of paper with words on it.
4. Explain what is meant by 'set the stage'.
It means preparing to show the world for the first information revolution.
5. Another word with the same meaning as 'arrival'.
The word is reached.
6. EXPLAIN WHY MATERIALS PRINTED DURING THE GUTENBERG ERA COULD SURVIVE FOR HUNDREDS OF YEARS.
The material was pure and tough and could survive the hundreds of years.
7. IN YOUR OWN WORDS CONTRAST THE REACTIONS OF THE WRITER AND MUNN TO BACHS CANTATA. 2 PARA 5
The writer could feel the emotions involved in the piece of writing the while Munn only saw the quality of the paper used by Bach.
8. Give a word to describe the atitude of the history librarian when he told the writer to go to the house of worship of his choice and pray. Para 8
The word is sarcastic to descibe the atitude of the history librarian.
Passage B:
9. Why was Julie Lewis' shoe so remarkable?
Asean in our ss book is very outdated! search on it and can throw in essay. sgp is the chairman of asean asian charter in wiki summarised in 2 pgs. constituition is a set of rules which govern a body (to resolve dispute more effectively: ASEAN charter) Role of ASEAN.
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