FREE WRITING ACTIVITY

 

This is a free-writing exercise. Write a paragraph (not exceeding 200 words) on any topic you like. Please be serious about this writing activity as I need to know exactly your personal style of writing. Do not cut and paste - I need to read a genuine piece of your own writing. You can start writing below.

 

 

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Seriously my mind is blank at this instant. Just by staring at this empty page, I cannot really think of any topics to 'squeeze' out. All I know is I am on the brink of insanity with a lunatic right beside me, staring into blank space. He cant think of any topics to write while everyone is putting great effort. Pain in the neck, hilarious, drowsy, immatured are the words just right for him. He is a classmate of mine since I was secondary one. Being one of my good friends, we always hang out together in a big group. Playing a fool, or rather making a fool , joking around and causing trouble. It's a bliss we ought to cherish.

 

Since we are good friends, we like to hang out together and have a good time, and unfortunately causing problems at times.

 

Sometimes I paused, I came to a realization. Perhaps I have played too hard. Being in last year in secondary school, facing one of the major examinations in my life. I know I should have started studying long ago. But I was not really those extremely studious and hardworking type. Sometimes I tried but in vain. My parents had quite high expectations on me, although he never said. I know. One and a half month is all I have got. Seemed long but time just flies. Seriously I dont read books and I never like to. And I wonder if my english will ever get better.

 

Comments :

 

 

Unfortunately, your writing shows that you do not read enough too. I can see that you try hard and that is good. You have a tendency to put the latter part of a sentence in the front. Too many times and it spoils your writing. But don't worry, there's still hope yet.

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Two paragraphs from favourite author

 

"Oh my god, I cant breathe," Blair gasped dramatically. She hugged one of her stepbrother Aaron's barley-husk-filled bed pillows against her stomach. "I'm going to throw up"

I wouldn't be the first time.

"Calm down," serena advised, arranging two little piles of white, cream and manila envelopes on top pf Aaron's egg-plant-coloured hemp bedspeard.her instincts in the park had been dead accurate blair was simply way too competitive to be civilized about the whole thing .

 

 

You're The One That I Want;

A Gossip Girl novel

by,

Cecily von Ziegesasdsdr

 

Comments :

 

Too short and too many typo errors.

 

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Running away

Intro - All these years she could not face the cruel reality. her father was dead- what she has always claimed.

nightmare seemed like forever. The happenings kept haunting her

 

para 1

- brought up single handedly by mother, her closest kin

- peaceful contented life

- sometimes deep inside yearn for a dad

 

(If you want to talk about the "closest kin", it has to be an uncle or aunt or a relative. If her mother or father brought her up, it is understood that Mum or Dad will be her closest kin - thus no need to mention this.)

 

para 2

- Teri's 16th birthday came. every year she receive a big surprise present.

- had no clue of the sender nor means to find out

- Waited for the present every year

 

para 3

-her mum made the confession. (How? Need details here to help you in your writing.)

 

para 4

- she could not accept a wanted felon as her dad

 

para 5

- fell into depression

 

para 6

-he turned in.

 

Conculsion-

Time slipped right by

too many tears she've cried

wasted, depressed

glad she got that off my chest. (hers or yours?)

Together they are waiting for the reunion,

in 10 years' time

 

Comments :

 

I cannot relate your plan to your title. Which part talks about "Running Away" or even relates remotely to the title? You have to be clearer and not make the reader assume for you. Based on the aove plan, I would say that you have written out of topic.

 

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Summary '03

Reasons why money developed by China proved so succcessful

- coins made up of cheap metals

- state guaranteed value, fixed shape and design to defy imitations

- coins encourage more traders and merchants

- banknotes appeared - more convenient

- issue under authority

-carry value=specific number of coins

-guarantee under state

 

why money produced by other countries proved successful

-metal coins and cities coin

-- widespread reputation- money worth acquiring

-production= successful trading centres

 

why in the end our money followed Chinese model

-- foundation of money followed other countries -

--cheap coins official stamp

-- gov authorities determined buying power

 

-modern banknotes with official guarantee

-Prevent cheap imitation

-cheap metals Cover expenses of re-making coins

 

 

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Muay Thai 2

Index No. : 16

Name: Vivien tan hui xin

 

3 sentences

Clad in a oversized polo top

A sly smile comes over her face and she lets loose her secret weapon

It is after he taunts her with "is that all you can manage?" that a transformation takes place

 

3 phrases

 

 

 

 

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Nov 04 Paper One

2) Furious arguement on a case of mistaken identity

 

planning.

- Anna was accosted by a stranger

- stranger was haggard and crazy

- created a scene refused to let go of her

- struggled and stranger dropped her wallet

- saw the photograph

- mistaken identity

- Not Anna, but Ashley

 

 

Someone, someone amidst the crowd was watching her, her every move. A shadow was creeping somewhere, getting nearer and nearer to her. She could not shake off the queasy feeling of being stalked. Her instinct got her feet walking faster and even almost running. Anna scrambled out of the shopping mall carrying several shopping bags in both tremulous hands. She was breaking out into cold sweats. Every drop of the sweat made her muscles even more tensed. She stopped for a moment to catch her breath and with a slight move, she looked from the corner of her left eye. Then she turned her whole body back and heaved with a sigh of relief. There was no shadow. I must have been paranoid, Anna thought. She let out an assured smile.

 

Anna felt a shadow looming behind her. Moreover, the evening sun which was shining from the back made the shadow stand even taller. She tried to run but was held back by a hand. This hand made her feel a shiver down her spine as she turned back to face the person. In front of Anna, stood a haggard woman, with unkempt hair, and bloodshot eyes staring straight into hers. She was not cordial. Her face grew bitter and the next moment she seized Anna by her shoulders and shoke her so hard that her shopping bags dropped to the ground.

 

"Tell me why! He is lying in there! You caused his pathetic plight! " She said tearfully. She tightened her grip so hard that Anna began to groan. Anna tried to push her away but in vain. The woman's fists were clenched tightly on her shirt. " I would never allow you to take him away. NO MORE!" she screamed her lungs out. The next moment, she broke down and fell to the ground, pulling Anna down too.

 

The commotion had already aroused many bystanders. Anna felt lost and disoriented. She did not know what to do next, who was this crazy woman who popped up of nowhere and creating this scene. "No, I am not Ashley. Let go!" Anna yelled. After much struggling and explaining, she was exasperated. ""Let go of me. Who are you?" Anna said vaguely, her voice still trembling. The woman was mad, shouting and pulling Anna back and forth. "You are Ashley, there is no mistake!" She said firmly. Just then, something dropped out of her pocket during the struggle. A wallet landed on the ground with its side up. A faded yellowish photograph with in it caught my attention. It was a picture of a man and the woman. The man... looked so familiar...So familiar.

 

"Brother in law? Ashley? Sister ?" Anna was baffled. By then two security guards had already seized her by both thin arms and kept her a distance away from Anna. " I am sorry that she have startled you, she escaped from the Mental Institution you see." One of the man said apologetically. The woman was still kicking hard, screaming away, trying to break free. Soon, her screams diminished in the distance and the commotion ended.

 

Anna took out her wallet and look at it and let out a long sigh. Her eyes were blurred with tears as she clasped the photograph close to her heart. She then recollected the sad past memories. The dreadful car accident which left her twin sister dead, and her brother-in-law in coma. Just then it struck -me -her, the woman was my brother-in-law's ex-wife whom could not get over him after their divorce.

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Xinmin Prelim'07

 

1a. The rowers are using extreme effort (No)

The rowers exert all their strengths to row the boat forward.

 

b.The sunlight flashes off the water causing reflections and obstruct the villagers' view (Not quite. Your answer must be more precise. Try again)

The sunlight flashes off the water causing discomfort to the viewers' eyes.

 

c. They are very engrossed and enthusiastic at the point of time. (Yes)

 

2. Conflicts will aise as the judges will fight for his village to be the champion (No.)

When the result is a draw, conflicts arise as the judges will fight for his village to be the champion.

 

3. The first consequence is that the tension between two villages rose and the second consequence is that a fight broke out. (1st is wrong, 2nd is correct.)

The first consequence is that they start to quarrel.

 

4a. The word is ' altercation' (Yes)

 

b. He heaved the sand into the air with the eku (OK but try to be more precise)

He swirled the sand into the air

 

c. The people in the fight were too engrossed to notice him (No)

Ans: It was his superb martial arts training.

 

d. The elderly gentleman threw sand at the rowers engaged in the fight (Yes)

 

e. He stopped the fight with the whirlwind cloud of sand and without any casualties (OK)

 

5. The author is trying to say that he hope that practitioners will understand that weapons can be used without causing injuries of others. (OK)

Ans: Not causing permanent injuries or causing lives

 

6.

 

7a. They alter their trainings to avoid danger, substitute artificial and counter training methods. And they limit targets and add precautionary movements in trainings. (Q asks for 2, you give so many. Please decide.)

They limit targets and add precautionary movements.

 

b. The ultimate conclusion is to retaliate (No.)

 

 

8. You will realise your strengths and abilities when in danger. (OK.)

 

9. To develop technique, knowledge and character (OK)

 

10. looking forward to (OK)

one after another (No) at the same time

full (No) great

malfunction (No) Ans: ineffective

corrupt (Yes)

 

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IJTP Prelim ' 07

1. People used to paint on bone and beaten mulberry bark

 

2. Paper was cheaper than parchment and could be produced in great quantities

 

3. The evidence is that it was forbidden even to step on a piece of paper with writing.

 

4. It means to make something possible or likely to happen.

 

5. The word is 'reached' .

 

6. It could survive for hundred of years due to it purity and strength with the lettering was ornate and filigreed.

 

7. Munn criticised the poor quality of Bach's cantata while the writer was fascinated at Bach's energy.

 

8. Nonchalant

 

9. It is recycled from waste into a worthy use

 

10. Julie is outgoing and thrifty.

 

11. She wanted a solution to nation's trash problems and she wanted to set a sample to others' industries to induce demands.

 

12. He means getting to the main points indirectly

 

13. Aluminium

 

14. They are the only city that recycle trash

 

15.

1- fragile

2- a small part

3- imitation

4- wasting

5-essential

 

CHIJ ST Theresa Prelim

1a. The goverment announced the results of its five-yearly census, Japan's 127m-odd population was 19000 fewer than a year earlier and death had outstripped births for the first in a period of peace since record have been kept.

 

b. Yomiuri Shimbun was upset when he views the issue of falling population.

 

2a. Japan is graying at an unprecedented rate

 

b. During the baby-boom generation ,many Japanese produced many children which now makes up the elder generation of the population.

 

3a. Japan is ageing like it has never experienced before.

 

4. The demographic pattern drops drastically, the birth rate is low and Japan suffers from ageing population 

 

5. There is large availability of university places that it becomes less competitive to get into university

 

6. Demands for goods decline, local industries suffers and national revenue decreases.

 

7. For older workers to work longer and lessen the strain on younger working population.

 

8.

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