FREE WRITING ACTIVITY

 

This is a free-writing exercise. Write a paragraph (not exceeding 200 words) on any topic you like. Please be serious about this writing activity as I need to know exactly your personal style of writing. Do not cut and paste - I need to read a genuine piece of your own writing. You can start writing below.

 

 

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After my Mid-year results. It seemed as if the whole world collapsed infornt of me. I was so disappointed. I did somethings that I should not have done after that. But now I have learnt my mistakes. I am so happy that i had parents,teachers and friends for me when I needed them the most. Never allow the obstacles you faced to obstruct your life. This verse has really helped me in many ways. I am not going to allow my past bother me in anyway anymore. I have started to prepare for my o level already. I have confidence on myself that I can do well in my o level. And head on with my destination which I have already engraved in my heart. There is another verse also I always keep in my mind. Never look down on anyone just because they are not as good as you, there will always be a time that they will get a chance to look down you. Alot of people looked down on me just because i did'nt do well for my Mid-year. I know that I will also get a chance to look down on them. But i will not do the same mistake they did. I will rather help them in all the ways I can help. For today onwards my only aim is to do well in my o level to make my parents proud.

 

 

Comments :

 

Based on what I've seen above, you will have problems with your essay in terms of grammar and sentence structure. You'll need to concentrate on paper 2 and the Oral to pull you through. In the meantime, please see me when you are free to work out an individual plan to help you.

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2 Paragraphs from a book of a writer's style which I like

 

When we both finished our sentences, his head dropped to the table slowly, creating a loud bang. his body began to sway towards me. I leaned forward to hold his shoulders, trying to break his fall but he was too heavy. he went on tumbling onto the ground and all i could do was to lessen the impact of the fall.

 

His eyes were closed and his cheeks were drained out of colour. i shook his shoulders violently. Bewildered students gathered arond us, whispering yet doing nothing.

 

-I believe you by Low Kay Hwa

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Introduction:

 

. first day in school

. started to make new friends

. made a new friend

. started to become close with her

 

Paragraph 1:

 

. the big secret i had( that i have been in girls home before because i had shopped lift shop-lifted!)

. why i could not keep the secret to myself

. what made me to bring myself forward to tell her my secret ( her sister also had gone to girls home before)

. i told her my secret

. her promise to me that she will not tell my secret to anyone

 

Paragraph 2:

 

. fight between us over certain things

. stopped talking to each other

. how she betrayed me by letting of my secret

. what happened when people came to know about my secret

 

Paragraph 3:

 

. the embrassment (embarrassment) i had to go through

. the anger i had on my friend

. my mother advising me to talk things out with my friend

 

Paragraph 4:

 

. my confrontation with my friend

. her reaction towards it

 

Conclusion

 

. both of us forgiving each other

. learning how to trust each other better

 

 

 

 

 

Outline Of Essay Comments :You should be able to pull this off if you can convince the reader of the agony and embarrassment that you went through. I see some problems with your sentence structure in your plan - you'll have to be extra careful when you write.Muay Thai 2NOVEMBER 2004 PAPER ONE5. Describe one of the large shopping malls in Singapore. Why does it attract so many customers?

(I Made A Mistake In Telling Her My Secret)

 

 

 

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SUMMARY ON 2003 PAPER

 

MY POINTS

 

. money encouraged increase in trade

. recongise the shape and designs

. strung through holes

. avoid weighing, banknote introduced

. banknotes became sucessful snd remained throught the chinese history

. other countries used this idea for another 600years

. other countries also use metal coins

. value of these metal earned widespread reputation

. other countries with all tese money also become sucessful

. coins lost their reputation gradually

. made other countries with all these money became sucessful

. coins lost their value gradually

. made out of cheaper metal like copper

. power of coins and money still remains to a great extent

 

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TEACHER'S POINTS

 

. state guaranteed value

. recognnised shape and design

. strung togther through hole

. encouraged increase trade, which in turn, ensured use of coins would flourish

. banknote - state guarantee value

. convenient form of money

. eatern europe- emergence of gold and sliver coins

. value earned them reputation as money

. production in leading cities in eastern europe- making them most successful trading centers

. cheap imitations,people chip off or scrape off valuablemetals from coins

. govts forced to melt and re-issue coins of cheaper/inferior metals

. but buying power/value of inferior-metal coins and banknotes guaranteed by governments

. lead back to original chinese model

 

 

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Index No : 20

Name : Thivia

3 Good sentence/starters for sentences :

- But although

- A sly smile come over her face

- Ten mintues later

 

3 Good phrases to "borrow"

- Small in size but not in spirit

- Typical teenage fashion

- Less mean fighting machine

 

 

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All over our tiny island are shopping malls. Singapore is famous for its shopping malls. They are more then 20 shopping malls in our country. One of the large shopping malls Singaporeans and tourist love to go in Singapore is VIVO CITY. Vivo City was built on the site of the exhibition halls of the former World Trade Centre, now the Harbour Front Centre. Vivo City has 1.5 million square feet of gross floor area and 1.1 million square feet of retail space. It was designed by the renowned Japanese architect Toyo Ito.The shopping mall opened officially on December 1, 2006 after its soft launch on October 7 that same year. The official opening included a six minute fireworks display, a concert by American band String Theory for the general public, and a Stefanie Sun concert at the mall's amphitheatre at the Sky Park on the third floor. The guest of honour of the event was chairman of Temasek Holdings and former cabinet minister S Dhanabalan. During its first month of opening, it attracted 4.2 million visitors, equivalent to the population of Singapore, and attracted 7.28 million visitors in total before the grand opening. The String Theory concert included a giant harp with strings stretching to the third floor of the mall.

 

 

Vivo city has Facilities which no other shopping mall in Singapore has. The design is so unique that even though the mall may be congested with people. They are always space for people to work. One of the main features which attract most tourist or local people is the Sky Walk. The Sky Walk has has an amphitheatre and also a very popular place to see sentosa. There is also the shallow pool on the third floor is where many children play at besides the playground downstairs. Some hold picnics beside the pool while their children are wading in the shallow pool. The mall has Singapore's largest cinema multiplex with 15 screens and 2,293 seats by the cinematic company Golden Village, along with one of the largest cinema screens in Asia. As a result of the cinema more tourist and local people were attracted to vivo city.

 

Other features include a Planet Fitness gym, spas, restaurants and dance clubs. A TANGS store is located in the building on the first and second floor, which it is the only branch other than its flagship Orchard Road store. The store will sell a number of merchandise that cannot be found at its Orchard Road store. The mall also has the first Gap store in Southeast Asia. There Companies such as Toys "R" Us and Dairy Farm have their flagship outlets in Vivo City. Dairy Farm, which owns Cold Storage, Shop N Save, Giant Hypermarket, 7-Eleven and Guardian Health & Beauty takes up 3,700 square metres of space on Basement 2 and about 7,400 square metres on Level 1. The new hyper mart, called Vivo Mart, is connected by its own revelatory and sells gourmet food from all over the world, including the United States, Germany, Japan and Australia. The hypermarket has a Giant in basement two and level one with a Naturally Marketplace by Cold Storage on level one as well as a Guardian pharmacy on the first floor. Naturally Marketplace sells organic products and gourmet food. There are two giant food courts — a 2,200 square metre Kopitiam Group facility in Basement 2 and another spread over 2,500 square metres run by the Bread Talk Group, which is a Food Republic food court in similar concept at its sister food court at Wismar Atria.

 

Besides all this features the main reason tourist come to vivo is because of its well linkages. There is a Link way at basement 2 that connects to Harbour Front MRT Station and the Seah Im Hawker Centre across Telok Blangah Road. Two air-conditioned bridges on level 2 (lined with shops) connecting to Harbour Front Centre. An outdoor pedestrian bridge on level 2 (near the Golden Village Cinema) linking to St James Power Station The Sentosa Express terminal station on level 3 connecting to Sentosa Island. Tourist loves to shop at places where there is accessibility. The reason why Singaporeans love Vivo city is due to the fact that they don't to travel overseas for certain things anymore. And also this is a place where they can unwind their stress and have fun with their family and friends.

 

 

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XINMIN SECONDARY SCHOOL

PRELIMINARY EXAMATION

ENGLISH PAPER 2

 

ANSWERS

 

1 (a) The word 'strain' tells me that the rowers effort was alot till the extend they were in pain (No. Expression.)The word 'strain' tells me that the rowers were struggling and putting in all their strength to go faster then the other team.

(b)The villagers had to squint because it was they were too far from the boat rowers (No) The villagers had to squint because the reflection of the sun was shining on them.

(c) It shows that the villagers were anxious.

 

 

2 When there is two judges, one from each village, to decide the winner of the race i think the problem of choosing the winner will arise. As the judges will support their own villages. (Under what circumstances.) In a circumstances when both the teams arrive the finishing the line at the same time, the promblem of choosing the winner will arise as the judges will support their own village.

 

 

3 The first consequence will be the heated argument between the judges and the second consequence will be the two teams of rower engaging a fight. (Why future tense. Q asks for what had happened.) Firstly they started to aruge and then start fighting

 

 

4 (a) The word is "altercation" (Yes)

(b) I think he used the eku and turned it around in circular pattern on top of the sand and then the sand rised in cirular pattern to form 'a whirlwind cloud of sand'. (Don't take it literally.)He used the eku which he picked up and scooped up sand rapidly and threw on the villagers.

(c) manged to move in relative ease as the whirlwind cloud of sand he formed would have caused people to move away from it. And also because the eku tripped off people so with fewer people he could move more easefully. (No)He manged to move in relative ease because he was skilled in martial arts.

(d)He threw sand on those who were fighthing causing them to be disabled.

(e stopping the fight without causing any permeant injury to anyone or any dead.

 

 

5 He trying to say that those who know martial atrs have the choice of not hurting anyone in a fight.