FREE WRITING ACTIVITY

This is a free-writing exercise. Write a paragraph (not exceeding 200 words) on any topic you like. Please be serious about this writing activity as I need to know exactly your personal style of writing. Do not cut and paste - I need to read a genuine piece of your own writing. You can start writing below.

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With all hopes lost

I stood there, frozen and stiff. Tears were trickling down my cheeks and my eyes hurting. I couldn't look at it anymore. I wanted to move it away but i was too scared. Scared of watching my future going down the drain in a flash. 21.... 21 points for my 'O' level examinations.

I had drifted far away from my goal of 11 points. How could all of this have happened? Maybe there was some mistake in marking. Or maybe its my parents' fault for not forcing me on my studies. Silly questions were clouding over my mind and adrenaline was rushing through my blood. How was i going to answer my parents? I will get a severe scolding from my parents.

I walked towards my mother, who had so much faith and trust in me. All of that faith and trust would be broken in the blink of an eye. Slowly, i approached her while dragging my feet. I stammered with fear, "I...I..scored twe...twenty-one po..points for my 'O' level exam....examinations". I dared not look and show my ashamed face. I always used to tell my mother that my 'O' level exams were quite easy. And i got this for an easy exam. That was so pathetic.

My mother just walked away. I guess she was much more hurt than i was to see me in this state. I just stood there, now with stream of tears gushing down like an unstoppable river. I got carried away with my lost hope. I just stood there, with all hopes lost......

Comments

A good attempt. Do away with cliches please - Tears trickle, tears roll, tears gush etc - ten thousand other students are using the same phrase and you are Number 10,001!! Read through your work again and remove those parts that are too exaggerated. Refine those that are rough and you should get a better piece of writing there.

Nancy Drew - The leaning chimney by Carolyn Keene

Taking care not to make a sound, they stepped cautiously as the voices grew more distinct. Presently the girls saw two men. Their backs were turned, and they seemed to be bending over something on a log. Unable to hear what they were saying, Nancy and George crept forward.

Nancy's attention was so fixed on the men that she did not notice a dry twig in her path. The next moment, there was a sharp crack as she stepped on the twig.

The girls heard a startled exclamation, followed by a hollow crash, as if something had dropped and broken. Without looking back, the men scooted into the brush and disappeared.

Comments :

Carolyn Keene writes in a simple style that is captivating too. Many of us will improve our writing much if we can just copy a few pointers from her writing. I must admit I used to read a lot of Nancy Drew and Hardy Boys books when I was younger.

Running away

Introduction: I woke up to the clangorous sound (Sorry but what sound is that?). As i woke up, i saw a Westland Scout AH1 helicopter showering my boat with bullets throught it's gattling gun. Judy was dead. I jumped into the shallow waters.

Paragraph1:

- I swam to an unknown island nearby

- Found Michael's dead body on the shore

- Picked up his Colt King Cobra revolver and headed towards the forest

Paragraph 2:

- Flashback of what had happened before the attack.

- Suddenly, a bullet whizzed bast my head.

- I looked up to see two faint outlines running toward me.

Paragraph 2

- I took behind a tree and fired 5 shots from my revolver

- I walk over to the men's bodies and discover a map

- I realize i am on Paul Robert's island

Paragraph 3:

- I had no choice but to run away (why? Do you expect more to come?)

- As i followed the map to the opposite side of the island, i was ambushed by a few men (You were ambushed by a few men and not a scratch on you? You've been watching too many James Bond movies?)

- I took cover behind a large rock and threw a grenade at the men. (Where did that come from?)

- I picked up their weapons continued on my way

Paragraph 4:

- Describe all the attacks on me as i made my way across the island (You seem to be a magnet for all kinds of attacks!)

Paragraph 5:

- It was getting darker

- I slept beneath some space made by two rocks

Paragraph 6:

- Woke up from the sounds of a security alert.

- I quickly made my way to my destination

Paragraph 7:

- A bullet pierces my right arm

- As i ran for my life, i tore part of my shirt and bandaged the wound

- My torso was smeared with blood from my arm

- As i looked back, a bullet perforated my head and i dropped down

Paragraph 8:

- The world around me was was getting brighter and brighter

- I was lifted out from a capsule with wires connected all over my body

- That's when Mr. Harrison comes over to congratulate me as i was the first person to test the STF (Soldier Training Facilitator)

- I looked down at my watch, it was 15 29, Wednesday, 12 April, 2042

Comments :

The year 2042. The weapons 20th Century. Doesn't really connect, does it? If you are so far out into the future, you won't be using the weapons of today and yesterday, especially if it is this STS that you are writing about. Again, I would suggest a local context - in this case, perhaps the SAF and names should also be local. You'll have to give more thoughts to your plot - too many missing links. I'll still give you credit for a unique story.

Summary (2006)

- China guranteed the money's value

- Coins carried low values, so huge amounts could be produced for everyday trading

- China invented the banknotes

- Banknotes caried the value of a specific number of metal coins

- Government of China guranteed the value of the notes

- Eastern Europe came up with gold and silver coins, following China's trend

- The coins became famous as throughou the time they were used

- Other countries followed

- Modern coils made of metal to cheaper metals to sustain the coin's value

- Buying power of coins determined by the government

- Coin's value is signified by a mark stamped on them

- The system became popular and other countries followed, until everyone uses it now.

Muay Thai 3

Index No: 27

Name: Siddhartha Dhiman

3 Good sentence/starters for sentences :

3 Good phrases to "borrow":

soft spoken and humble

rain or shine

gruelling intensity

School Uniform (2004)

In this rapidly advancing society, we have different kinds of people with different religions. We have the rich, the poor, the middle-class and so on. Let's say you are in a shopping mall, you will see all kinds of people. On one hand, you will see people wearing heavy jewelleries and expensive clothes. On the other hand, you will see people in plain clothing. Petty crimes like robbery, theft and stealing are all born from this economic difference. People feel a twinge of envy when they see other people in possession of something that they do not have. This results in petty crimes. This is when a uniform drops in.

A uniform, as the name symbolises, is something that keeps us uniform. In other words, it hides all of our economic statuses and keeps us united. When we wear a uniform, our status is partially hidden from people's view. For example, in a school everyone wears the same uniform, it would be rather difficult to pick out the rich and the poor as they all look the same. Students tend to think that everyone in the school are from similar backgrounds and usually get along well. This reduces the occurence of petty crimes in schools and ensures a safe learning environment.

In schools, students forget about their backgroud status to unite as one through their uniforms. They become more aware of their surroundings and recognise their importance to the world. They develop an identity through this way.

A uniform represents our school, more like our 'second home'. Our school is responsible for our actions and deeds. For example, if a student is caught smoking or taking drugs by the public, his school will gain bad reputation. However, if a student produces good results that are competitive nation-wide, the school will gain nothing but good reputation and popularity. As the society becomes more competitive in the education field, the competition for better results becomes increasingly overwhelming. Students work hard to obtain good results and make their school proud and strive to make its uniform more prestigious to wear.

A unifom makes us much more matured. We become confident in our actions and think good of our school. Therefore i agree that a school uniform gives pupils a sense of identity and encourages good discipline.

November 2005 (Paper) - Topic 3

Tourism is getting popular among people of all ages. Businessmen, teachers, students and families all pack their bags to embark on a journey. This journey could me education, fun,or profitable depending on the reason to tour. Just like other tourist 'hot-spots', Singapore is a major tourist attraction.

Singapore is located in South East Asia, near the equator, so it has a tropical temperature, which is favourable to most tourists. The weather in Singapore is consistent and doesnt change much, which makes it a good tourist attraction as tourists' plans wouldnt be ruined by the rain.

Singapore is a multi-racial country with a British background. It's Chinese, Malay, Indian and Eurasean ethnicities attribute to its cultural diversity. Singapore's official language is English and it is generally easier for tourists to understand the locals. The transport in Singapore covers almost all of the public places in Singapore, with MRT (Mass Rapid Transist) being the most efficient.

Although Singapore is not much of a nature based island, it still has many other tourist items up it's sleeves that attracts numerous amounts of tourists. Singapore has the world's first night safari. The Night Safari enables visitors to explore the dark side of the wildlife allat night. Here, one is expected to see the savage and nautrally born killers from a new prespictive. Visitors can also purchase souveniers and show the world that they had been to the world's first night safari.

Tourists can visit the colourful and radiant Chinatown. Here, tourists get to experience the Chinese culture adn tradition and even century-old beliefs thats are still practiced. The food offered in Chinatown is truly unique and mouth-watering. Visitors can visit the Food Street for a meal of their lives. Visitors and also enjoy shopping here. One can buy antique and hispanic items to add vibrancy to their homes. And the best thing is, bargaining is a common rule here at Chinatown.

XMS Prelim 2007

1(a). The rowers are trying their best and pushing their bodies to the limit in order to make the boat travel faster. (Good answer)

1(b). It was very sunny day (AND) the bright reflection of the sun on the water surface caused the villagers to quint(SP) their eyes . (OK)

1(c). The villagers were very eager and anxious to know the race results. (OK)

2. The judges might be biased towards their own village and make them win. (Why have the race then?)

3. The argument among the two judges caused a big fight among the competitors from the two villages. (OK) The second problem that arose was that a winner couldn't be chosen, which resulted in a draw among the competitors. (???)

4(a). The word is 'altercation'. (Yes)

4(b). The gentleman flung the sand using the eku to create a 'whirlwind cloud of sand'. (More precise, please)

4(c). The gentleman could have used the eku to clear his way by hitting the brawlers around him. (No.)

4(d). The gentleman flung sand at the rowers, caused them to be temporarily disabled and thus bringing an end to the fight. (Yes)

4(e). The gentleman did not injure anyone permanently. (No)

5. I think that the author is trying to say that the incident should not be forgotten and should be used as a lesson to the practitioners. (No)

6. Martial art is implemented in real life and can be used as a form of self-defence. But martial sports is just a game or play. (OK)

CHIJ Paper 2

1. People used to paint on cave walls and boes.

2. Egtian parchment was less popular than real paper because real paper was much more cheaper and easier to print on.

3. The Chinese were forbidden to step on paper with writing on it.

4. It means that papermaking was one of the first milestone for information revolution in Europe,

5. The word is 'reached'.

6. Materials printed in Gutenberg ero were printed on paper made of hemp and linen rags, a combination of these two gives a strong paper which lasts for hundreds of years. Thus the material printed in Gutenberg era could survive for hundreds of years.

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