FREE WRITING ACTIVITY

This is a free-writing exercise. Write a paragraph (not exceeding 200 words) on any topic you like. Please be serious about this writing activity as I need to know exactly your personal style of writing. Do not cut and paste - I need to read a genuine piece of your own writing. You can start writing below.

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At the blink of my eyes (You have powerful eyes!! Phrased wrongly and you are better off not using this cliche at all), the holidays ended. We are suppose to have one whole month of holidays but it seems not true ('untrue' would be better but then again, the word is inappropriate here. What do you think would be a good word or phrase to use here?) . We only got (have, not 'got') 2 weeks to be exact. The other 2 weeks we would have to come back to school to have our remedial lessons. Lessons for the class to prepare for the 'o' levels. We got approximately 2 months before our prelims and the teachers are all rushing to clear the syllabus. We got e-maths remedial, biology remedial, chinese literature remedial, physics remedial and chemistry remedial (remedial is used 5 times in one sentence!!). Sometimes the remedial can be real boring but afterall i had learnt something during that holidays (awkward sentence - you should rephrase).

But the worst part is, for the rest of the 2 weeks, i am practically wasting my time. I would sit behind the television or computer and waste the whole day away. After enjoying the excitement of playing, i started to regret for not using my time wisely. By right, i should make use of the holidays to do some revision, but i did not. Like the others says 'Man always regret what they did when it is over.' (who said this? never heard of this phrase!). I regretted.

Comments :

Your writing is not smooth. Learn to construct the sentences in your mind before you write it down. Tenses is another problem. You need to get the basics right first. Please don't use quotations that you cook up yourself.

You owe me two more things.

The two Paragraphs:

When it came sailing out once more there was no sign of the climbing figure. It had vanished. Snubby suddenly began to feel very scared indeed. His hair gradually rose up from his head with a horrid prickly sensation. Shivers went down his spine. He longed for Loony.

His eyes began to play tricks with him. Was that a figure standing at the bottom at the castle walls, far below the barred windows? Or was it a shadow? Was that a figure half-way up the walls? No, no, that was the outline of a small window. Was that a figure up on the roof by the chimney? No, no, of course not, it was a shadow, just the shadow of a chimney. And was that a . . . ?

Book: The Rilloby Fair Mystery

Author: Enid Blyton

Topic: I made a mistake telling him my secret

Intro : When I was 7 years old, my brother placed a lizard beside my bed when i was sleeping, and when i woke up, i jump up with terror and fear. Since then , I had been afraid of lizards (phobia) and when I happen to see one , i would run for my life (you might want to rephrase this).

Para 1 :

- One day after school, Jerry and I were walking back home. We were (have been) friends since primary 5.

- Started talking the good times were spent together.

- Decided to tell him my fear for lizards.

- He promised to keep it a secret.

Para2 :

- For the next few days, I was glad that my secret was not exposed. (Did you have any reason to suspect that he would tell on you?)

- But at the fifth day, when i went to school, i started to hear giggles from my classmates. All their vision were on me (Eyes, not vision).

- I was very puzzled.

- Do not know what had exactly happened.

Para3 :

- Went to my seat, and when I was preparing to sit, I saw 3 dead lizards on my chair.

- I screamed and ran out of class.

- The whole class broke into laughter.

- I was very embarassed.

- Pretend that nothing had happen.

Para4 :

- Went home sadly and started thinking how did the class know that i hate lizards?

- Finally knew it, only Jerry knows about the secret.

- He is the one who told the whole class.

- I was furious and called him straight away.

Para5 :

- He answered and confessed that he told the whole class the secret.

- He even said that it was my fault for telling him the secret knowing he could not keep a secret well.

- I scolded him , and then hung up.

Para6 :

- The next day in class, i was so angry with Jerry that I do not even care about the mockings from my classmates.

- I did not talk for him for a long time and he did not even apologised.

- I had lost a friend.

- I regretted telling him my secret.

Comments :

Would have been good to have a stronger conclusion - perhaps some close friends of yours helping tp patch things up, or your teacher came to find out about the incident and educated the class. Interesting story because it is quite original.

Summary Nov2003

- the coins had a recongnised shape and design

- had a hole in it so that it can be strung together

- the state guranteed the value of the coins

- encouraged increased trade, which in turn, ensured use of coins would fluorish

- Banknote - state guarantee value

- convenient form of money

- made from cheap metals

- the coins were issued under the authority of the state

- they are in low value, so alot of coins would be needed

- people began to chip off the valuable, metals from the coins

cheap fake coins were issued

the coins were issued under the authority of the state

- carried a value equal to the a number of coins

- value of real coins drop

- the notes had an government official stamp on it

- modern banks had the official stamp as their guarantee to the value

Index No: 34

Name : Soh Wen Zhong

3 Good Sentence/starters for sentences :

- It sickened me to hear that the injury appeared to have inflicted intentionally.

- They endorse an attitude of win at all cost and that is the lessons that the students will take away with them.

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3 Good phrases

- decication and commitment

- relentllessly pursued

- bitter rivalry

2004 Paper 1

2) Write about a occasion when a furious argument took place, based on a case of mistaken identity

Whenever I see those people going around with donation cards for donation, i would clearly remember the incident that happened 2 years ago.

This was what exactly happenned.

I was suppose to hand the $300 donation to the teacher from the class for the orphanage, but suddenly, i started shouting." My money is gone !! Who had taken it? " I had placed it on my computer desk, and now it has gone missing. I began to panic . "How am i going to tell the class i had lost the money?" that was the question on my mind. I started recalling when was the last time i had seen it. " John!!!" yes, it is him .. He is the only one in the room since last night. I called John immediately but he did not pick up the phone. I started flipping through the address book, hoping to find John's address. Found it ! I left the house and after 10 minutes, i reached his apartment. I knocked on the door and his mother opened it and said that john had left the house early in the morning. I was feeling very nervous at the moment. Now i had no idea where he was. I started searching for him near his blocks and the void deck. No traces of him after 30 minutes of long searching. Suddenly i turned and saw the back of someone, it looks like john!

I followed him and noticed that his actions suits all of John's. I started running towards him and hitted hardly at his back, like what i always do when i see him in school.

To my very surprise, the person whom i hit is not john, he was just someone who look like John. I apologised to the groaning man and I could see him with tears in his eyes. " Why do you hit me ?" He shouted angrily at me. I said sorry once again but he continued his scolding. I felt very angry. I had already apologised and why is he still reprimanding me? " Hello ! I had already said sorry! What more do you want?" I shouted back at him. At the corner of my eye, i could see that there was a crowd gathering around me. But that does not affect me, i continued scolding and cursing but soon, the police came. To our very surprise, they police came and handcuffed both of us. Both of us were brought to the police station for questioning. That was the first time i had been to the police station.

The police helped to calm us down in the police centre and soon we were both released with a stern warning. I apologised once more and embarrassedly walked home. When i reached home, i was too tired to think about the money i had lost and went to bed after bathing. The next day in school, i bravely went to the teacher in charge and told her i had lost the class' donations, but later she replied, " John, you had gave it to me the day before yesterday. Remember?"

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Xin Min Secondary School

1) They are all trying very hard to overtake the opponent. (OK)

1b) The reflection from the sunlight is hindering them from getting a better view. (How can there be reflection from sunlight???)

1c) They must be feeling very excited. (OK)

2) Both of the judges wanted their own village's participants to win. (So?)

3) Two rowing teams begin to shout at each other and they began fighting. (OK)

4) The word is "altercation'. (Yes)

4b) He swept the sand to the crowd involved in the argument with the eku. (sequence is wrong. SS.)

4c) The man has a smaller size as compared to the crowd as he has a hunched figure and this made him move with relative ease into the uncontrolled crowd. (No)

4d) He swept sand to the uncontrolled mass causing them to stop what they are doing to remove the sand from their body. (OK)

4e) He did it the way that no one is injured. (Right but SS)

5) It is used ad self defence but not injuring others.

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CHIJ Paper 2

1) The people painted on walls of caves and on the beaten mulberry bark.

2) Real paper is much cheaper than parchment and it can be produced in large quantities.

3) They are not supposed to step on paper with writing on it.

4)

5)

6) Paper were made up of hemp and linen rags which is much stronger than the normal paper produced.

7)

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