FREE WRITING ACTIVITY

 

This is a free-writing exercise. Write a paragraph (not exceeding 200 words) on any topic you like. Please be serious about this writing activity as I need to know exactly your personal style of writing. Do not cut and paste - I need to read a genuine piece of your own writing. You can start writing below.

 

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Topic: Soccer in aid.

 

Soccer, the that beautiful game that is known by almost everyone, is no more just about 22 men going for a ball. but More than that, it is also about reaching out to for the poor and needy, about making positive impacts around the world. Take the recent tsunami in 2004 for example. After the disaster had struck Aceh and many parts of the world, famous soccer clubs like Manchester united and Barcelona, together with unicef (UNICEF!) managed to raise millions of dollars for the victims.

 

In some countries, where violence and discrimination are widespread, the only thing that seems to unite the people of different races and religions together is soccer. There are people that (who?) are willing to put down the hatred against one another and come together to play as a team, regardlss if (?) they are representing their country or town. At the same time, it builds up mutual trust and respect among the the different race and religion__, which will inturn __cease (?) the problem on violence and discrimination.

 

On the other hand, The Federation of International football Association(Fifa) has also been putting in numerous effort (how do you count effort?) in resolving the problemof racism. If you remember the 2006 Fifa World Cup held in Germany, all the captains of respective countries are to say the pledge against racism before every single match - I take your point but you need to rephrase. This was made compulsory by Fifa in promoting the anti-racism campaign.

 

In conclusion, it is indeed a wonder on how a simple sport had evovled to something that inspires positive changes throughout the world.

 

Comments :

 

A good discussion on soccer, moving away from traditional soccer genre to concentrate on the good that soccer promotes. Note how you write your sentences - that's where your weak point is.

 

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English (2000 P1 section 1)

Topic: Running away

 

Introduction: I was always afraid of failure and because of that, I'm always running away from problems. However, i managed t__o overcome my fear for it in once__ and understand that it is not about the result but the process of learning my mistakes and not repeating it and self -belier.

 

 

Para 1

- Use to score well for my exams but my results started to decline.

- As a result, i became not confident in my tests and exams.

 

Para 2

- Situation got worse when i started comparing myself with my siblings which was doing extremely well.

- It made me feel lousy and useless.

- I hated it espcially when people started comparing me with them.

- Disliked the criticism so i tried studying hard for one particular exam but there wasnt much improvements.

 

Para 3

- I gave up.

- Seeking excuses to run away from exams and tests

 

Para 4

- My parents saw my problem.

- Instead comparing me with my sibings like what the others and i did, they encouraged me.

- It wasnt immediate that __i brace myself up__.

 

Para 5

- During my mid- year, my results were still very inconsistent.(i already overcome the fear for failure mentally by not running away from exams)

- This time round, i looked into my mistakes instead of bombarding the thoughts of being the 'black sheep' of the family

- why? Because i knew that i have to believe that self-belief is the first step to success. Besides, if i were not to believe in myself, who would?

 

Para 6

- My results improved tremendously.

- I still fail some of my tests but that didnt discourage me.

- Instead, it gave me room for improvements.

 

Conclusion: We can never stop comparing ourself we others. Comparing ourself with someone __lousier __would only discourage __he or she__. Comparing ourself with someone better would only make us feel useless and __lousy__. So, the most important thing is to have self- belief and learn from our mistakes in whatever thingswe do.

 

Comments :

 

Satisfactory outline but lots of grammatical errors. You need to watch out for that - it will bring you down if you are not careful.

 

 

 

Summary for 2003.

 

Money Developed in China sucessful

_ cheap metal used but guranteed value

-Coins conformed to a recognised shape and design

(strung together throguh holes)

-Subsitute with notes instead of coins as have to be weighed

-equal value to specific coin and was convinient

( encouraged trade, coins flourished)

 

Money produced by other countries also sucessful

-adapted to the use of gold and silver coins

-leading European cities coins were fashioned form the preciouse metal -value of coins earned a widespread reputation

 

( sucessful trading)

 

Why followed chinese

-counterfeit and made of worthless material thus the value of coins drop

-coins were destroyed and the government have to re-issue them with cheaper material

money had to be spent

-coins in circulation lost their value -Value was there despite the use of cheap material

 

- lead back to the use of Chinese way

 

 

 

Index No : 35

Name : Tan Yen Sen

 

3 Good sentence/starters for sentences :

It ripped off a chunk of flesh in the ankle area leaving part of the bone exposed.

 

3 Good phrases to "borrow"

 

injury appeared to have been inflictied intentionally

abdicate their reaposibilities

endorse an attitude to win at all cost

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Flight

 

 

 

It was always pitch dark even when the scorching sun is out providing warm and light for Earth. The only light that seems to enter my cell was a tiny beam of ray from the window above my sleeping area. Living conditions in the prison were far worse than anyone could expect. Rats and cockroaches will infest my cell, contaminating the food given by the warden during my meals.

Resting against the wall, i was once against angered for being charged for something i had not committed, I remembered vividly how i was falsely accused by the police. That very night of Chinese New Year, i was ordered by my parents to get some beer for the family. On my way to the nearest supermarket, i was given a hard blow on my back and went unconscious. It was so sudden that i did not manage to catch a glimpse of the attacker and when was i regained conscious, i was lying beside a badly bruised man with a baseball bat in my hands. As immediately, four policemen rushed into the scene and apprehended me. Since all evidence of injuring the victim was against me and I could not prove myself innocent, I was charged for assaulting.

Thoughts of breaking out of the hellish place soon formed in my mind. Day and night, I studied the prison and make plans for my escape. I knew I would be outnumbered by the wardens unless I have the strength of the bull, so I started feeding myself with exercises like push-ups and sit-ups that could make me physically stronger. Meanwhile, I took every opportunity to familiarize myself with the prison whenever I was allowed to the yard every morning. Escaping soon became seemingly impossible as I realized that there were too many wardens on duty every single minute and second. However, it was not exactly impossible…

“What if I could create confusion?” I questioned myself. Right away, I knew it was the most ideal plan. I would activate the fire alarm causing the wardens to evacuate out of the building. Then, the wardens would be too busy in keeping order and by the time they realized that it was an false alarm, I would have made flight for freedom.

The very next night, I executed my plan. I activated the fire alarm by throwing stones I got from the yard at the alarm from my cell. Two tries and the alarm went ringing.

Pandemonium broke lose. I followed the crowd till the second level when I turn right instead of heading downwards. I managed to break away from the crowd without getting anyone’s attention by feigning a fall. Now, I was a door away from breaking out. I unlocked the door with a golden pin I had found in the yard earlier.

“STAY WHERE YOU ARE!” I was discovered by one vigilant warden. Immediately, I locked the door and placed a table behind it to make it difficult for the warden from entering the room. Now, I was staring at the ventilating unit. It was the one last obstacle. Without hesitation, I plunged a metal rod into the unit, giving a small explosion enough to make a hole for an escape. When the warden managed to force himself into the room, I was already preparing for a jump. I gave the warden once last look and leaped for freedom.

 

 

 

 

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Xinming O level Prelim 2007 Paper 1

1a) It tells us that they are trying very hard and pushing themselves to the limit. (Good answer)

 

b) The light is reflecting off the water and into the villager's eyes causing them to have difficulty looking at the race. (OK)

 

c) It tells us that they are very excited and anxious about the race. (Yes)

 

2) There would not be a fair decision as the judges from the respective village will be biased to it's own team and thuys(WWIT?) the final decision could not be made. (No.)

 

3) When the judges could not decude(SP) on the answer, they will start argueing(SP) and leading to a fight. (1m)

 

4a) The word is 'altercation'. (Yes)

 

b) The man uses the eku to throw sand at the rowers engage(d) in the fight. (Be more precise)

 

c) He was moving into the crowd quietly. (No)

 

d) He used the eku to trip a rower and several bodies to stop the fight. (SS)

 

e) He managed to stop the fight with no casualities(SP). (V careless with your spelling.)

 

5) The author hopes that both the rowers and judges will embraced good sportsmanship and positve fighting spirit in the future. (No)

 

6) The difference is martial sports are not effective for self defence, fighting or combat while martial arts is effective as thry train for real life. (OK)

 

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Chij tp 09 prelim paper

 

1. People used to paint on the walls of caves and parchment made from animal skin.

 

2. Parchment was more expensive to produce and they could not produce in great quantities.

 

3. The evidence is, " It was forbidden even to step on a piece of paper with writing on it. "

 

4. It meant that paper was the first stepping stone for the information revolution.

 

5. The word is ' reached".

 

6. The purity and strength of the material made the paper still look as handsome and new even after hundred of years.

 

7.

 

8. The word is 'pessimistic.'

 

9. Julie lewis shoe was made from recycled materials.

 

10. It tells us that Julie's character was strong and prepared for any hardship.

 

11. She felt that it was one way to reduce the nation's thrash problem.

 

12. It means the the author did not went straight to the point.

 

13. The most commonly recycled material is aluminium.

 

14.

 

 

15. brittle- fragile

      fraction- portion

      ingeunity- idea

      squandering-

      integral- compulsory part

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